ARMS Revision Blueprint
ARMS Revision Blueprint
Desk Reference • Student Writing Tool
Revision Guide
How to use this blueprint: Work through your rough draft one letter at a time. Use the examples to help you revise.
A
Add Details
Put in more sensory words, descriptions, or transitions.
Ask yourself: What does the reader need to see, hear, or feel?
Draft ➔ Revised
The dog barked.
The friendly dog barked excitedly.
R
Remove Clutter
Take out words that repeat or don't help your point.
Ask yourself: Did I say this already? Can I delete unnecessary words?
Draft ➔ Revised
My friend he went to the store.
My friend went to the store.
M
Move Words
Move words or parts of sentences so they flow better.
Ask yourself: Does this make sense? Does moving this part sound better?
Draft ➔ Revised
I ate a pizza delicious.
I ate a delicious pizza.
S
Substitute Words
Trade overused or boring words for powerful, vivid words.
Ask yourself: Can I trade 'nice' or 'good' or 'said' for a power word?
Draft ➔ Revised
He said the show was good.
He whispered the show was exciting.
Friendly Tip for Success
Read your sentences out loud. If you get tongue-tied, try using Move or Remove!
Revising is NOT Spelling!
Right now, focus ONLY on your words. Spelling, capital letters, and periods are next (that is CUPS)!
ARMS Revision Slides
Writing Lab Presentation
SLIDE 1/10
The ARMS Revision Blueprint
Let's learn how to tune up our rough drafts! Make your writing stronger, clearer, and more interesting—one step at a time.
Ready Check: Give me a silent thumbs-up if your writing blueprint is on your desk!
Step 1: Add
SLIDE 2/10
A
Add Details
Put in more sensory words, descriptions, or transitions to paint a picture in the reader's head.
Draft Sentence
The dog barked.
Revised Sentence
The friendly dog barked excitedly.
Partner Share: Whisper to your neighbor one other descriptive word we could ADD to this sentence!
Quick Practice
SLIDE 3/10
Your Turn to Revise!
Look at this draft sentence on the board. Let's make it more interesting by adding descriptive details!
Draft Sentence
"The rain fell."
Class Challenge: Think of a sensory word (like how the rain felt, sounded, or looked). Tell your partner your newly revised sentence!
Step 2: Remove
SLIDE 4/10
R
Remove Clutter
Take out words that repeat, boring filler words, or sentences that don't help make your point.
Draft Sentence
My friend he went to the store.
Revised Sentence
My friend went to the store.
Thumbs Up Check: Put your thumbs up if you see why the word he was clutter! Thumbs down if you want another example.
Quick Practice
SLIDE 5/10
Your Turn to Revise!
Look at this draft sentence on the board. Let's make it clean and neat by removing repeating word clutter!
Draft Sentence
"The small tiny puppy played."
Class Challenge: Whisper to your partner which duplicate word we should DELETE from this sentence to make it perfect!
Step 3: Move
SLIDE 6/10
M
Move Words
Change the position of words, phrases, or full sentences so they make better sense and flow smoothly.
Draft Sentence
I ate a pizza delicious.
Revised Sentence
I ate a delicious pizza.
Word Swap Check: Give me a thumbs up if you see how switching these two words makes the sentence sound correct!
Quick Practice
SLIDE 7/10
Your Turn to Revise!
Look at this draft sentence on the board. Let's make it flow smoothly by **switching the mixed-up words**!
Draft Sentence
"The cat black slept."
Air Loop Trace: Draw a loop in the air with your finger, showing how we switch the words cat and black so they flow nicely!
Step 4: Substitute
SLIDE 8/10
S
Substitute Words
Swap generic, boring, or tired words (like "nice", "good", or "said") with powerful vivid verbs and adjectives.
Draft Sentence
He said the show was good.
Revised Sentence
He whispered the show was exciting.
Word Swap Challenge: On the count of three, whisper a synonym for "said" that shows how someone might talk in a library!
Quick Practice
SLIDE 9/10
Your Turn to Revise!
Look at this draft sentence on the board. Let's make it awesome by **substituting generic words** with exciting power words!
Draft Sentence
"The girl went to a nice party."
Class Challenge: Whisper to your partner a better word to substitute for went or nice!
Put It Together
SLIDE 10/10
The Master Revision Challenge
Let's revise these two sentences using our entire ARMS strategy!
A R Sentence 1
"My friend he slept."
➜ R: Delete the extra pronoun.
➜ A: Add details (How or where did they sleep?).
M S Sentence 2
"The dog happy barked."
➜ M: Switch the order of the mixed-up words.
➜ S: Substitute "barked" with an exciting power verb.
Seat Challenge: Choose Sentence 1 or Sentence 2. Whisper your fully revised masterpiece to your partner!
ARMS Notebook Insert
ARMS Revision Outline
Notebook Paste-In • Left Side
Name: _________________
A
Add Details
ADD means to put in more sensory words, descriptions, or ___________________________.
What details can help the reader see, hear, or feel?
R
Remove Clutter
REMOVE means to get rid of words that repeat, boring words, or word __________________.
Did I say this twice? Can I delete unnecessary words?
M
Move Words
MOVE means to change the position of mixed-up words so they flow __________________.
Does this make sense? Does switching these words help?
S
Substitute Words
SUBSTITUTE means to trade weak or generic words for exciting ___________________ words.
Can I trade "nice" or "good" or "said" for a power word?
Cut along dashed lines • Glue into the LEFT side of your journal
ARMS Class Practice
Notebook Paste-In • Right Side
Name: _________________
A
Draft Sentence
"The rain fell."
My Revision: _____________________________________
R
Draft Sentence
"The small tiny puppy played."
My Revision: _____________________________________
M
Draft Sentence
"The cat black slept."
My Revision: _____________________________________
S
Draft Sentence
"The girl went to a nice party."
My Revision: _____________________________________
Cut along dashed lines • Glue into the RIGHT side of your journal